And while the idea itself is a good one, the writing tries too hard to be flippant and winky, and comes off like a smirky teenager. There is one version of the daughter who, I shit you not, says ‘duh’ all the time. Guys, I thought we’d retired ‘duh’ as both an actual thing we all say, and as an ironic thing we make characters say to illustrate their eye-rollyness. And it’ll probably be hard to tell without context but is the following segment – ‘Meanwhile, Christina, sounding amazed, asked, ‘Me?’ and then, sounding puzzled, said, ‘No.’ – is that jokily bad, or legitimately, accidentally bad? I have suspicions it’s the latter.
Also, despite averaging around 20 pages/story, there are a surprising number of plot holes. Also, if you are an omniscient narrator, someone can give a hoot of disbelief or a hoot of protest, but they cannot give a ‘hoot of disbelief or protest’ because those are two different things and you have to know which one you mean.
I should caveat that if anyone ever describes someone as saying something in a [descriptor] tone, my monkey butler automatically throws the book out. TO BE FAIR, Luella doesn’t say something in a ‘what-kind-of-fool-are-you? tone’ until page 89 of 116, and I was already well into hating the book. I just thought you should know how much that expression grates my cheese, since I’ve run out of things to say about the book itself.
Three caterpillars! All of them for the great idea.